Treatment Template ( initial ideas and improved initial ideas ) Pitch and Group Meeting

Treatment Template : Initial Idea
 
Title:
At the moment i haven't come up with a title for my opening sequence
 
Date:
12/11/12
 
Production:
Group 1

Presents A :

Crime Drama
 
About :
 
My Crime Drama is about a young girl who gets involved in a gang that she shouldn't have. The gang make her do an Initiation Test to see if she is worthy enough to hang around with them and make her steal from a shop . As the girl goes in The gang run away leaving her to deal with the crime she's about to commit by herself. The shop keeper catches her and calls the police, but the girl knows she can't be caught as she has a previous track record ( has commited other crimes before )Trying to prove herself innocent the young girl tries to track down the gang to get get revenge.
 
Characters:
 
The main character is the young girl who commits the crimes and tries to get revenge. I would need to get other people to help form part of the gang and have a police officer too.
 
As The Story Unfolds :
 
We realise that the young girl is actually innocent to the xcrimes she has previously commited and we see how she seeks out her revenge.

I PlanTo :
 
 Stick to the genre and not make it too comical or too serious. Stick to the codes and conventions of a crime drama but also try to deviate from the normal stereotypical roles.
 
Sound :
 
I will use a range of different sounds to fit with the clips , at a range of different paces to help create tension and effect.

Camera Angles and Shots :
 
I will try to include a lot of different camera angles and shots such as close-ups on the item that the young girl steals to help the audience understand whats going on and also to help build up tension and create effect.
 
Mise-En-Scene:
 
It will be set around an urban town to get a feel for where the young girl lives ,  as well as gangs usually being assosiated with hanging about on the streets.
 
The characters will be wearing casual clothing such as hoodies and jeans/ tracksuit bottoms as that is typical to what gang members or 'chavs' usually wear. My crime drama breaks the usual stereotypes as young males are usualy involved with gangs and commit crimes

Executive Producers:

Miss.Buttler and Mr.Lawes.
 



Treatment Template improved idea

Title:

At the moment I haven't come up with a title for my opening sequence

Date:

13/11/12

Production:

Group 1

Presents A :

Crime Drama

About :

My Crime Drama is about a young girl who gets involved in a gang that she shouldn't have. The gang make her do an Initiation Test to see if she is worthy enough to hang around with them and make her steal from a shop . As the girl goes in The gang run away leaving her to deal with the crime she's about to commit by herself. The shop keeper catches her and calls the police, but the girl knows she can't be caught as she has a previous track record ( has commited other crimes before )Trying to prove herself innocent the young girl tries to track down the gang to get get revenge.

Characters:

The main character is the young girl who commits the crimes and tries to get revenge. I would need to get other people to help form part of the gang and have a police officer too.

As The Story Unfolds :

We realise that the young girl is actually innocent to the crimes she has previously commited and we see how she seeks out her revenge.

I PlanTo :

Stick to the genre and not make it too comical or too serious. Stick to the codes and conventions of a crime drama but also try to deviate from the normal stereotypical roles.


Camera Angles and Shots :

I will try to include a lot of different camera angles and shots such as close-ups on the item that the young girl steals and her facial expressions as she is about to steal the item from the shop and is running away from the police , the eye contact with the audience from the close ups will make them feel more involved as it helps to create tension from direct address. I will also include a montage as she is running away from the police , this will include Long Shots, Close-ups of her facial expressions and feet as she is running and a close up of her head turning around to see if the police are following ehr. By doing this tension is created as, as an audience we want to know if she gets away from the police or not as one of the Enigma Codes. 

Sound :

I will use a range of diegetic and non-diegetic sounds in the opening sequence such as diologue between the girl and the gang using slang names and not propper english as thats trypically how most people involved in gangs or wonder the streets talk especially the generation of today. I will use quite slow music when the young girl is about to enter the shop to help create tension and then really fast pace action music when she is running away, during the montage to go with the pace of the filming. All the sounds and effects will be synchrous to the clips.

Editing :

I will use a fade to black at the begining of the clip just after the long shot of her sitting in a dark house by herself. The black slide will say "  2 hours before " as part of the enigma codes and as each characters are shown the clip will be paused briefly so their name and character name can appear on the screen. And during the montage directors and editors names e.t.c will flash up and appear as well.


Mise-En-Scene:

It will be set around an urban town to get a feel for where the young girl lives , as well as gangs usually being assosiated with hanging about on the streets.

The characters will be wearing casual clothing such as hoodies and jeans/ tracksuit bottoms as that is typical to what gang members or 'chavs' usually wear. My crime drama breaks the usual stereotypes as young males are usualy involved with gangs and commit crimes


Enigma Codes:

Why does she join the group ? Will she get away from the police ? Why does she have a track record ? What crimes has she comitted ? How will she get revenge on the gang ? What sort of home life does she have to want to join a gang and commit crimes ?



Executive Producers:

Miss.Buttler and Mr.Lawes.





 Pitching My Idea And Group Meetings.

After I had improved my initial idea, i had to then pitch it to the rest of the class, whilst another person in a different group peer assessed my idea. Each member of My group had to pitch their idea and after we got all of our feedback back we sat and discussed what worked well or not so well in each of our initial ideas and tried to put together one strong idea for our actual opening sequence.




My Feedback Sheet


What do you think worked well ?

What kind of revenge ? ( enigma code)
Presents an interesting issue
The darkness to add effect
Montage sounds interesting

What do you think could be improved ?

We already know what might happen in the film as we know the rest of the story will focus on her revenge.



 

	Weak	Satisfactory	Strong	Comment
Suitability as an opening sequence			X	It uses good enigma codes and isn't a whole story
Camera
Editing
Characters			X	The main character has a good conflicting past that adds to her character
Mise-en-scene		X		The mise-en-scene is fitting to the genre as it is rather dark
Creative flair/ keeping within the genre			X	As opposed to focusing on the police she has changed the perspective the audience will be looking out for.
Overall			X